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Hey guys,

Are there any lyricist’s and melody writers in the house?!

Long story short, i wrote this song about 17 years ago (fek im getting old!).

I came across an old band practice recording of it the other day and got inspired to record it “properly” and add some production.

So its now complete with totally unnecessary and gratuitous long winded intro and guitar “solo” that do nothing for the actual song but where fun to record nonetheless! Haha

The original vocal melody and lyrics I wrote haven’t aged well, lets just put it that way. I dont want to use them and tried coming up with new lyrics but i just keep getting stuck because i cant unhear the original in my head!

Im wondering if anyone would be keen to have a crack at coming up with a vocal melody and lyrics? Ill sing but of course would give full credit to the lyric/melody writer :)

Just thought it could be a cool way to collaborate with someone and get a totally unique and new perspective for the vocals.

Here’s a link to the song - https://drive.google.com/file/d/1JpqKIC ... sp=sharing

Please excuse the rough mix. I just did a quick run through and threw a limiter on the master which is brick walling the fek out of it! Haha, wont stay like this for the final mix 👍

Anyone keen? Cheers!
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Nice. Lyrics? you don't necessarily need lyrics. Its a perfect instrumental. Perfect intro or finish or somewhere between for your gigs

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chrisz wrote: Sat Apr 17, 2021 10:24 pm Nice. Lyrics? you don't necessarily need lyrics. Its a perfect instrumental. Perfect intro or finish or somewhere between for your gigs
thanks bro! I hear what you're saying but I wrote the song with lyrics and leaving it instrumental would just feel "unfinished" to me.
I haven't played in a band for a few years now and I haven't played gigs for about 15 years so no need for gig filler :)
I do this home recording stuff for fun :thumbup:
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Fair. Maybe someone can help you modify the lyrics, even just a good friend. Good luck.

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I listened to it and I think I know where the intro ends and the 1st verse starts. This is then followed by a chorus followed by 2nd verse. Is this correct? Perhaps you can provide timeline if I am wrong...
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Jay wrote: Sun Apr 18, 2021 12:55 pm I listened to it and I think I know where the intro ends and the 1st verse starts. This is then followed by a chorus followed by 2nd verse. Is this correct? Perhaps you can provide timeline if I am wrong...
lol yeah, would help if I provided that aye! sorry. here's were the original vocals kicked in etc:

2:04 - verse 1 starts
2:22 - chorus 1 starts
3:10 - verse 2 starts
3:47 - chorus 2 starts
4:58 - short "v3/c3/refrain" before solo starts

Its a bit of a weird structure in that the verse riff ends out the song, not the chorus. Also it didn't originally have a "3rd" chorus in full vocals wise.
I just sang "xx xxxx xxxx xxxx, xxx xxx xx" x2 (the xx's represent the number of words I sang) when the guitars come back in after the drums + bass breakdown and then the solo starts and takes the song to the end.

If you want I could hum the original vocal melody over it but didn't want to include it at first in case it messed with people's first reaction. Keen to see what SWIM would come up with! :)
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do you have lyrics anywhere?

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NippleWrestler wrote: Mon Apr 19, 2021 4:33 pm do you have lyrics anywhere?
Yip, got the original lyrics and melody but they are embarrassing! Haha I didn’t include them because I thought someone who was keen/inspired to write lyrics for the music wouldn’t want to hear a “previous” version. Thats the issue i have - i cant seem to write new lyrics because my brain cant un hear the original ones and it doesn’t flow the same when i try new words if that makes sense
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jeremyb wrote: Mon Apr 19, 2021 6:57 pm "Burning, looting, raping, and a shooting" REPEAT.
nah, too deep & emotional bro. want something more fluffy like - "Unicorns, rainbows, ice cream and cake. Give me some of these and lets swim in a lake" ya'know - that sorta vibe ;-)
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